AuenOmen
So some time after I got back from the army  I needed to take a vacation so I told my GF Xin and we went to Japan for a week. 

I saw a classic katana sitting in a smith shop and was drawn to it I picked it up and drew the blade with a dragon down the blade and  saration  1/4 of a circle it had a feeling of doom in it in holy to the pure when Xin held it she screamed in pain saying it burned me. 

Shop keeper told me the samauri who used it killed menny un accused innocent the gods cursed his blade  with a sigel that harms pure and lying beings and would kill them in time it was a trading curse  and it killed him. 

I bought it cause I knew I was not holly I know I and an angel with black wings a cracked halo and have fallen from heaven and been through hell and I never lied to my self cause it's an offence to your own soul and mind. 

It sunders dawn burning through  all un holly it's poetic justice and un holly blade killing the wicked and damed. 

But the cost of the blade was your humanity and 2k$  
The blade is wizard and beutyus  it has static feal to it but I gave my humanity up long ago love I bear the cracked halo and black wings  for the end  of story 

Au is gold
GoldenOmen
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nox_lumen
Your writing is near impossible to follow. The spelling errors don't help, so please google words more often. "gods cursed his blade  with a sigel" should be 'sigil', for example.

Also, there is nothing classic about a serrated katana. No self respecting samurai who wanted to live through a fight would weaken expensive folded steel with a serrated edge. This would lead to blade snapping log before you could buy it. Additionally, a smith shop would only have a serrated katana to sell to dumb tourists, and I'm pretty sure you still overpaid for cheap Pakistani steel. If you don't call it a katana and say you found it at a flea market or junk shop, this whole thing looks more plausible.

Your using run on sentences. I can see you trying to make an OVER POWERED ORIGINAL MALE CHARACTER, but it's a head ache to read all the OP details the way you wrote it.

I saw a classic katana sitting in a smith shop and was drawn to it (PERIOD GOES HERE!) I picked it up and drew the blade with a dragon down the blade( PERIOD GOSE HERE AND YOU DIDN'T NEED TO USE THE WORD BLADE TWICE!)  and("IT HAD" WOULD BE A MUCH BETTER WORDING HERE THAN "AND")  saration (THIS WOULD BE AA GREAT PLACE FOR A COMMA, AND FIX THE SPELLING MISTAKE)  1/4 of a circle (YOUR PERIOD GOES HERE) it had a feeling of doom in it (THIS IS YOUR NEXT PERIOD) in holy (THE WORD YOU WANT IS "UNHOLY" NOT "IN HOLY" AS THERE IS NO HOLY IN IT IF I FOLLOWED THE PREVIOUS SENTENCE) to the pure (THIS IS ANOTHER GOOD PLACE FOR A PERIOD) when Xin held it she screamed in pain saying (YOU NEED TO USE A QUOTATION MAR TO START SPEECH) it burned me. (XIN STOPPED TALKING SO YOU NEED ANOTHER QUOTATION MARK HERE)


If you want I could do more grammar, spelling, and punctuation corrections, but you seem to be more invested in the OPness of a poorly developed character then story craft, so I'm not sure how much of my help you're ready for. I mean why do I even care what your girlfriend's name is? Hell, why do I even care that you have a girl friend? At this point in your story, I don't even care what gender you are, let alone what species you identify as. Without some character development past "I'm a super evil super human with no apparent motivations" your reader has nothing to empathize with, and now is board to tears.
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